Friday dawn, the fortnight shall come for us to meet
Arrive at Grand hall, in air fall, and drop in feet
Through glass walls, I'll see that beautiful smile of yours
Walking to you, opening all those daunting doors
The daring day shall come for us to hold in hands
Lay down on the shore where I write your name on sands
Twilight time will twinkle the sparkle in your eyes
Those diamonds glitter like the sun longing to rise
Morning sky shall shine, we're up to climb mounts so high
Where I kneel in snow white, and ask for us to tie
The moment will come for us to gaze, dive and drown
Dreaming you're my queen and kingdom, wearing the crown
Sunset brings that golden heart, on your chest, a gift
The token is our love, so we may never drift
The night shall fall and so I'll hold you in my arms
I'll promise to love you, forever safe, no harms
I'll be the sword, your soldier, castle is our home
Our throne is glory, eternal, bright like the Dome
Days will pass, seasons fall, years go by, so we age
Our story goes chapters never reach the last page
For I have hope, we're truly destined as one
You're the blossom, the flower, my Flora, like none
Alireza Manzour
December 13, 2013
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ReplyDeleteWHERE DO YOU GET YOUR INSPIRATION FROM??
ReplyDeleteWhy a FLOWER out of ALL THE THINGS you can write about?
ReplyDeleteBecause he loves flowers
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ReplyDeleteCHELSEA!!!
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DeleteYou would be much more liberated in free verse, to be honest. Rhyming couplets, while suited to the days of old, unfortunately is a bit contrived, especially when combined with the very strict meter you're going for. In the modern day, we use shorter words in compared to the past, so it's harder to make the meter sound genuine, especially since you've chosen to write it in hexameter rather than in pentameter.
ReplyDeleteFlora. :3
ReplyDeleteIt very romantic yet cheesy. I really enjoyed the poem, I think every girl would. :) Good job, keep up the good work! :p
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ReplyDeleteVery Interesting but too deep :3
ReplyDeletethe previous comment was...." Deep,VeryDeep. You said it was for someone...So definitely heartfelt :D
ReplyDelete"Where I kneel in snow white, and ask for us to tie"
Who is that someone special???
This post is so sweet it gave me diabetes.
ReplyDeleteThats mean, you will perish on the fields of tables.
DeleteWell done.
DeleteEwwwww........
ReplyDeleteSo da flora....
ReplyDeleteAwesome
ReplyDeleteThis is nice. Now about the cheese poem...
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